outstretched: A chibified cute furret on a brown backround (Default)
For every mile of ocean crossed ☆ ([personal profile] outstretched) wrote in [personal profile] ishime 2010-04-20 04:53 am (UTC)

The only thing I notice as being a little odd is "His family considers him the worse problem kid ever"—it should be worst.

Aside from that, you do a great job of being understated and creepy. Nice work!
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